space to leave

[sarafina mable]

he liked to dance when he got high
circling the room, hurdling the couch and broken table
he never nerved her when they were high together
she kept his every movement traced behind her eyes
pictures of him
she wanted him to break her heart
curious about the empty space he could leave

[Hannibal]

I love your works.
I could read your poetry often and not get tired of it.
.
this part

she kept his every movement traced behind her eyes
pictures of him
she wanted him to break her heart
curious about the empty space he could leave

<font size="2" face="Verdana, Helvetica, sans-serif">I like those lines, they really really make the piece I think. The beginning is a great setup to that, and the last line, is a wonderful closing.
It's a closing/opening. It closes the peice, but seems to "open" other doors as well.
I really like this.
Great to see you back posting [img]smile.gif[/img]

[sarafina mable]

thankyou, you are so gracious!
i'm so ecstatic to be posting again, thank YOU!

[crazy a]

Not bad. I kinda liked this one.